Read this column by a "literacy specialist". Talk about bad writing.

I can't get passed the second sentence and the unnecessary use of "In fact". That's some second grade shite right there.

That is an awful article, but if it is meant for Mississippians and those educated in the state, maybe the writer is writing for his audience and trying to dumb it down.

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I can't get passed the second sentence

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Phelton Cortez Moss serves as a literacy and data specialist with the Clarksdale Municipal School District supporting Kirkpatrick Health and Medical Science Magnet School. He taught at Greenwood High School through the Teach for America program for two years. Both years he was Teacher of the Year.

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I wish someone would tell me how successful common core will be implemented in that school district.

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Consistently starts sentences with prepositional phrases. He uses sentence fragments. The word "you" is used. There are more. /

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As a poor writer, I was expecting his errors to be relatively unnoticeable. I figured this was a chance for better writers to point out minor flaws (e.g., split infinitives). You were correct though; there were noticeable fragments and other flaws that may be forgivable in a post here but not in this type of article. I think he inadvertently proved his point though.

Maybe a better writer can correct me, but these appear to be two fragments. Ironically, this is related to his discussion about writing prompts.

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For two of the passages, six questions and a writing prompt. For the last two, six shared questions and a writing prompt.

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The word "you" is used.

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The second person should rarely - if at all - be used in any type of "formal" piece of writing. This is one of my pet peeves.

Jesus, that article is super choppy.

The choppiness is the style preferred by editors. When I wrote for the college newspaper, I was told to write one to two sentence paragraphs.