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Yo... Got a minute?
Posted on 1/24/26 at 8:24 pm
Posted on 1/24/26 at 8:24 pm
I'm snowed in and slumming round the ot for a little street cred for this thread on the Movie board. Looking for a little action on a Sat Night.
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To me, It's huge and taken a long time to get to this point, but it's the only work that I am allowing released to the public. And for an amateur, I have now stepped up to Producer, and if I get it sold then I will be a Professional. So I am excited to get some feed back. Even if it is from the ot.
WWII Movie... 1 Minute... Let me know... I know you will.
Brother can you spare a dime?

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To me, It's huge and taken a long time to get to this point, but it's the only work that I am allowing released to the public. And for an amateur, I have now stepped up to Producer, and if I get it sold then I will be a Professional. So I am excited to get some feed back. Even if it is from the ot.
WWII Movie... 1 Minute... Let me know... I know you will.
Brother can you spare a dime?
This post was edited on 1/24/26 at 8:25 pm
Posted on 1/24/26 at 8:37 pm to WWII Collector
My baw...you want my honest advice?
You need a writer.
I'm sure you've got the gear, the time, and the money, but that told zero story.
I like you. I want to help you. I think you might have potential. But it's so so so rough right now it needs a ton of work. You need it to say something, and right now it says
"WHEEEEEEE!!!! I'M A CRAZY OLD MAN WITH ACCESS TO MILITARY HARDWARE! WHEEEEEEE!"
And I mean that with all due respect. You are better than this. Get a proper writer.
ETA: is there more for context? Because right now it seems like an...unhinged old man hates a guy named Joe and is spitting lead from a prop plane while some GI's walk a cart down a road? I don't know what I'm supposed to think.
It's about pacing. A movie should be poetry in motion. Each scene a stanza that contains an identifiable and necessary part, a gear that turns the next.
A gear spinning on its own it meaningless, but even a well crafted gear, absent of outer context, should at least convey something. This...does not, and it does it badly.
You need a writer.
I'm sure you've got the gear, the time, and the money, but that told zero story.
I like you. I want to help you. I think you might have potential. But it's so so so rough right now it needs a ton of work. You need it to say something, and right now it says
"WHEEEEEEE!!!! I'M A CRAZY OLD MAN WITH ACCESS TO MILITARY HARDWARE! WHEEEEEEE!"
And I mean that with all due respect. You are better than this. Get a proper writer.
ETA: is there more for context? Because right now it seems like an...unhinged old man hates a guy named Joe and is spitting lead from a prop plane while some GI's walk a cart down a road? I don't know what I'm supposed to think.
It's about pacing. A movie should be poetry in motion. Each scene a stanza that contains an identifiable and necessary part, a gear that turns the next.
A gear spinning on its own it meaningless, but even a well crafted gear, absent of outer context, should at least convey something. This...does not, and it does it badly.
This post was edited on 1/24/26 at 9:27 pm
Posted on 1/24/26 at 8:53 pm to fr33manator
quote:
My baw...you want my honest advice? A movie should be poetry in motion
This is where she comes in... Trouble always finds me... Nellie Sentelle

This post was edited on 1/24/26 at 8:56 pm
Posted on 1/24/26 at 8:59 pm to fr33manator
quote:
You need a writer.
quote:
I like you. I want to help you.

Posted on 1/24/26 at 9:26 pm to CocomoLSU
Relax, I don't want to help write his movie. But the man asked for advice.
But what he needs is someone to pace it.
I've written scripts before and done a teaser trailer. Every second needs to be doing something. It needs to set things up. Or else its gonna be crap.
Watch MST3K sometime. TONS of bad movies (now made hilarious.) but what gets me is how much time bad movies spend on shots that do NOTHING. Cars driving up. People walking up. Silent Transitions.
If there's no dialogue, no action, or no emotion...cut it. It's not serving you
But what he needs is someone to pace it.
I've written scripts before and done a teaser trailer. Every second needs to be doing something. It needs to set things up. Or else its gonna be crap.
Watch MST3K sometime. TONS of bad movies (now made hilarious.) but what gets me is how much time bad movies spend on shots that do NOTHING. Cars driving up. People walking up. Silent Transitions.
If there's no dialogue, no action, or no emotion...cut it. It's not serving you
Posted on 1/24/26 at 9:28 pm to CocomoLSU
quote:
CocomoLSU
I knew you’d be in here!
Posted on 1/24/26 at 9:31 pm to WWII Collector
Absolutely amazing work! Rated very high.
I'd be interested in an acting part.
I'd be interested in an acting part.
Posted on 1/24/26 at 9:46 pm to WWII Collector
Do you know how to use ChatGPT?
Tell it that you wrote a movie script and that you want it to help you edit and make suggestions to the plot. Feed it the movie script and go from there. If you are a frequent user and its familiar with your interest, how you talk (well.. write) it will suggest things catered to you.
That would be the best way to go about it IMO.
Tell it that you wrote a movie script and that you want it to help you edit and make suggestions to the plot. Feed it the movie script and go from there. If you are a frequent user and its familiar with your interest, how you talk (well.. write) it will suggest things catered to you.
That would be the best way to go about it IMO.
Posted on 1/24/26 at 10:03 pm to fr33manator
quote:
It's not serving you
It will when negations for Creative Control and residual sales occur.
I did something.. Even if it was wrong. (Page 3 US Soldier's handbook 1941)
Story.. You betcha... Got 6 years of Story, 3 analysis', and now 4 people involved besides me... But I did that... When everyone said: "That's not how you do it." I see why now.
Posted on 1/24/26 at 10:05 pm to OweO
quote:
Do you know how to use ChatGPT?
Tell it that you wrote a movie script and that you want it to help you edit and make suggestions to the plot. Feed it the movie script and go from there. If you are a frequent user and its familiar with your interest, how you talk (well.. write) it will suggest things catered to you.
That would be the best way to go about it IMO.
Thank You OweO.. You are correct.
Posted on 1/24/26 at 10:11 pm to WWII Collector
I feel bad now. This is clearly a passion project and believe me I know and support that, but just from what you've shown...what does it mean? Where does it fit in?
Can you tell us more of the story? Make it make sense.
I hope I haven't offended. I like you as a poster and you have some amazing stuff.
Can you tell us more of the story? Make it make sense.
I hope I haven't offended. I like you as a poster and you have some amazing stuff.
This post was edited on 1/24/26 at 10:11 pm
Posted on 1/24/26 at 10:23 pm to WWII Collector
I have no idea what is really going on in that clip. The voice over is poor.
Posted on 1/24/26 at 10:24 pm to fr33manator
Your posts lead me to believe that you absolutely DOMINATE the weekly writers' circle at the neighborhood brewpub.
It must be draining to have to explain your approach to the novices who show up each week to drink but aren't really committed to the craft.
It must be draining to have to explain your approach to the novices who show up each week to drink but aren't really committed to the craft.
Posted on 1/24/26 at 10:28 pm to PowerTool
In which brew pub is this happening?
This post was edited on 1/24/26 at 10:38 pm
Posted on 1/24/26 at 10:35 pm to WWII Collector
quote:I’m going to need a singing frog.
FREE BEER!!!
Posted on 1/24/26 at 10:36 pm to alajones
quote:
I’m which brew pub is this happening?
Probably most of them. I just noticed the small distillery/pub in my neighborhood has a writers' circle.
Posted on 1/24/26 at 10:44 pm to fr33manator
quote:
I feel bad now.
Can you tell us more of the story?
I like you as a poster
It's OK my friend. I really can't tell more. or I'd give it away. So I am working on something now to present to the public... and this was a step. I'm personally am way behind schedule... Should have been done long ago.
Pilot is Wilhelm. and Nellie?
Annie Mae

This post was edited on 1/25/26 at 2:01 am
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