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Okay, son, don't hurt yourself!
Clearly you're new at this.
Let me help. I'll dumb it down for ya'll.

See.. We'll put YOURS together and fail to see any limerick.
Your rhythm, my boy. It's not there.
Did you ever try to dance?
Not everyone can do it.

Spartan fans invading our board
Friday they will hear quite the roar
No pride they have
Their posts make me laugh
Wave goodbye final four

DAH da DAH da DAH da da DAH
DAH da da da DAH da da DAH
da DAH da DAH
da DAH da da DAH
DAH da DAH da da DAH da DAH


Wow, what a mess you made!
Now, then.
Let's look at the fixes that I supplied earlier:

Spartan fans invading our board
Friday they will hear quite the roar
No pride that they have
Their posts make me laugh
Wave goodbye to that final four


DAH da DAH da DAH da da DAH
DAH da DAH da DAH da da DAH
da DAH da da DAH
da DAH da da DAH
DAH da DAH da DAH da da DAH


Ooooh, can you see the symmetry??!
Give it another go. You're almost there.
Bingo.
just a trim on the end to be pedantic.

There once was a lass from Nantucket
Who cheered a State team that could suck it
She took the whole crew
To play LSU
Showed how to stuff balls in the bucket
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Spartan fans invading our board
Friday they will hear quite the roar
No pride they have
Their posts make me laugh
Wave goodbye final four


Ok this one is clever.
You started so strong this time, but with fading effort in last part.
(Is that an LSU thing?)
Just a little balancing the syllables.
(you've almost got this)

Spartan fans invading our board
Friday they will hear quite the roar
No pride that they have
Their posts make me laugh
Wave goodbye to that final four

quote:

Based on some of the comments, they don't think too highly of our fanbase.


RCMB
LSUCatnip
FTR- Most LSU fans know MSU doesn't play zone. We just aren't good with zone and that worries us. BTW- I wouldn't put much stock into anything you read on the Rant.


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The tournament is fun, entertaining to see Thanksgiving is for Cowboys not you guys, silly! In the bracket you’re third at best Put those Final Four hopes to rest State is so racist watch that Detroit movie

Wow, the middle here is really quite good!
However, I think you're boxed in by your choice of tricky starting rhythm.
(gotta be the same on lines 1,2 and 5)
Try this on for size, the accents are in caps to help you see it...

the TOURnament is LOTS of fun, and ENTertaining ME
thanksGIVing is for COWboy fans and NOT you guys, silLY!
in the BRACKet you’re THIRD at BEST
put those FINal four HOPES to REST
state's RACist though, just WATCH movie deTROIT and you will SEE


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Tigers living in Spartans heads without rent Your economy stinks like your personal hygiene scent Detroit is a s*** hole as the president would say Motor vehicle industry more in debt each day Go drink some water from Flint


No, no. See, that just doesn't work as a limerick.
Really nice color but zero rhythm and then even the rhyme broke down at the end.
Please, allow me to help.
You'll get the hang of it...

Spartans have Tigers in heads with no rent
Economy stinks like their hygiene-less scent
Detroit a s*** hole like our prez might just say
Car industry failing, more debt every day
Drink some Flint water, geaux get yourself bent.